PA#8 -- Write your introductory paragraph for WA#3
ALERT! The due dates for the bog entry have changed. Because of a change in the scheduled date of my daughter's dissertation defense, I will NOT be in class on Wednesday, October 8. I WILL hold class on Friday, October 10. We will discuss your bog entries, therefore in class on Friday, October 10.
Due on the blog: Thursday, October 9 at 5 PM.
Due on the blog: Thursday, October 9 at 5 PM.
Due as a draft in class by 9 AM (bring it with you): Friday, October 10.
Write a draft of your introductory paragraph for WA#3. Note that the paragraph is NOT the summary paragraph you wrote for a previous PA assignment. Instead, it should include at least the following:
1. A hook. Try to make it vivid and attention grabbing.
2. Transitional sentence(s) that lead from the hook either to your thesis or to the author's thesis. Try to make the transition a smooth one. Build the bridge.
3. The author's point to which you are responding. The point may or may not be the author's entire thesis. You may only be responding to one of his or her sub-arguments. However, you should at least summarize the author's main point and then transition to the point to which you are responding.
4. Your thesis, which is a response either confirming or refuting her or his thesis. Try not to repeat. Try to make your thesis a unique take on the author's point of view. All good theses are precise in their wording, restricted in their scope, and unified in their response.
You may want to include elements of your summary paragraph in a paragraph that follows your introductory paragraph, especially if you are responding point by point to his sub-arguments. However, please don't include a detailed summary of his arguments in the first paragraph.
Introductory of the paragraph #3
ReplyDelete1. Hook: The human race never stops the steps of learning in all ages. When the seed of civilization began to grow, and stretched its branch, the most exuberant tree of Earth is born, which it never had before, the history of human being. The reason why the plant can grow up is because of the water, both do the civilization. The way that civilization is developed and carries on the history’s line is education. Education and learning are the greatest things of human activities. People can die, but the civilization wills not, as long as the education exists, the learning does not stop.
2. Transition sentence: If people just like the branch of the tree, the knowledge just like the nutrient substance though the branch and the education is the regulating bodily functions. To make the tree lush, the regulating bodily function has to be complete and developed. Therefore, the contemporary education is so significant for people. And that’s why so many educators suggest the government to optimize the education system.
3. The author’s point of which I responding to and my argument
1. By giving F’s can promote the education system.
2. Sub argument, Singleton thinks by giving F’s will force school and parents to notice and pay more attention on student’s study.
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My arguments
First, giving more F’s will have a huge impact of the enthusiasm of study.
Secondly, I believe that student will study harder when they get F, however, on another hand, student will lose the time for relaxing and playing.
Another point worth mentioning is that the relationship between the parents and students.
Everyone has experienced failure in their life. Do you remember when you took home that first “F” from school? You may not remember, but others will never forget. Singleton’s theory of everyone deserves “F’s” so that their parents get more involved in there children’s education may grab the parents attention, but some might not handle the grade in the right way.
ReplyDeleteErin Fannin
ReplyDeleteHow far is too far? Do the ends always justify the means? These are only a few or the numerous and fundamental questions that must be asked when considering the use of torture. Clarke and Bagaric take the stance in their article that torture should be permissible in certain situations. They claim that a situation can become so extreme that the only answer is torture. But is torture really the only means by which the end can be reached? Torture brings out the worst of humanity even as it is try to fight that very evil. Torture should never be an option in a civilized society.
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ReplyDeleteOften times within Essays the auhor chooses to make statements on something they strongly believe in. That is just the case in Carl Singletons Essay “ What Our Education System needs is more F's.” In his essay Singleton makes several statements attempting to pursuade the reader to agree with his point of view, on teachers giving F's to their students. Singletons view is very reasonable , and in the end is benficial for everyone involved.
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Imagine that you are an innocent journalist and have been taken hostage at gunpoint by one of the world’s most terrifying terrorist organizations, ISIS. A United States Special Forces sniper has a clear shot on the suspect holding the gun, and one shot can be the difference between your life and death. However, the sniper may not shoot the suspect because the harm done to him may dehumanize society and possibly lead to a slippery slope of reckless violence. Too much time has passed, and you’re decapitated head is now on Al-Jazeera for the world to see. Living in a society that refuses to protect innocent lives is indefensible. The well-being of a suspect should never be put in front of the well-being of the victim, especially when it is a life and death situation. In the instance of torture, the same principles should be applied. In Baragic and Clarke’s essay they confirm this point, “Torture is permissible where the evidence suggests that this is the only means, due to the immediacy of the situation, to save the life of an innocent person”. Torture has been used for centuries to save good people from harm. Some physical pain inflicted on a suspect is well worth the lives of potential victims. Torture is a viable and necessary option that should continue to be used by governments across the globe in order to protect their citizens.
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ReplyDeleteSafety from torture, freedom, and life has slowly become abolished for the lives of many animals. Animals are being tested on for government reasons such as diseases and surgeries to where they are being killed for completely pointless reasons. Unfortunately animals are viewed as less then humans, when truthfully some are just as smart if not smarter than some humans. Yet, animals do have laws set in place for abuse but there is no line between abuse and science. If testing on an animal can help a human then the government will test on an animal because animals are looked at as less than humans. In the prescientific age animals were so called “things” now, with extensive research we have found that animals such as apes are a lot more intelligent and complex then we originally thought they were. This goes to show that animals do deserve more legal rights and laws should be implicated for the protection and safety of animals in this day and age.
David Herbawi
ReplyDelete“To be honest, in those situations [of interrogation] I really had no idea what I was doing.”
~ Bob Bear/Frank, CIA Veterans.
One of the arguments made in Mirko Bagaric and Julie Clarke’s essay Torture: When The Unthinkable Is Morally Permissible, is that torture can be a life-saving practice. Their belief is that under certain situations, information gained from torture may be the only way to protect innocent people, likening it to a scenario where the only way to recuse a hostage is to shoot the suspect. While Bagaric and Clarke address counter arguments made by those against torture, their essay fails to provide even one example where torture saved a life. This is very important because the actual effectiveness of torture is a topic of just as much contention as the morality of torture.
We’ve all felt the anticipation of receiving a graded assignment back. The anxiety of seeing the fruits of our labor. The crestfall felt once we see the big, fat F glaring back at us, mocking us. The shame that followed the disgraceful grade. Carl Singleton campaigns for the increased use of more failing grades in his essay, “What Our Education System Need Is More F’s”. Singleton supports the almost sadistic notion by stating that once attention is brought to the students, parents, teachers and administrators, all or some of them will take action and thus improve the grim state of our education system. This is making quite a few assumptions of these individuals participation. Singleton overlooks certain circumstances, as well as the ramifications that would arise from such actions being taken, naively idealizing the the results to be positive.
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ReplyDeleteIn the ninth grade, I received a D in Math. Terrified of my parents' reactions, I dialed their respective numbers with trembling fingers and told them the news. When my mother came home from work, she spoke in English and addressed me by my full name. Dread pooled in the pit of my stomach because my mother rarely spoke to me in English unless she wanted to express her disapproval or disappointment. My mother's reaction, however, was nothing compared to my father's, who couldn't even look at me. I remember calling a friend later that night and saying, "What if he never talks to me again?" For two long days, I was miserable. An onslaught of dark thoughts began invading my mind all because of a single ugly D. When my parents finally came to terms with the bad grade that I had received, they consoled me and suggested that I get a tutor so that I could perform better in upcoming tests. As a result, I was able to overcome my failure. Unfortunately, some parents react in a much harsher manner when they learn that their child has brought home a failing grade. For instance, in my senior year of high school, two students committed suicide after the first week of final examinations, not because they had failed (the results weren't out yet), but because they were afraid that they would. Just look up "student commits suicide after failing" on Google, and you'll see that there are over 2,560,000 results. In the essay "What Our Education System Needs is More F's," Carl Singleton overlooks the fact handing out a final grade of F can have devastating effects on students and parents alike. Failure is only effective when a person knows how to take it in stride and use it as a motivational tool. However, the truth is that most students are easily discouraged by failure, and that results in an increasing number of dropouts.
David Krein
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Successful people are made by their failures, not by their successes. As C.S. Lewis once said, “failures are finger posts on the road to achievement.” In the essay, What our education system needs is more F’s, by Carl Singleton, Single argues that giving out more F’s to students would help their parents contribute more to their academic success. This statement is true, but only for the parents who have the time, or the parents who desire to help their children. What the increased number of F’s in America’s educational system would do is, help our education system recognize the real problem behind failing schools, provide failing students with some extra motivation, and increasing the number of F’s given would stop giving credit where it is not due which leads to a false sense of success.
PA#8, intro to WA#3
ReplyDelete“Where ignorance is bliss, ‘tis folly to be wise.”
Ode on a Distant Prospect of Eton College (1742), poem by Thomas Gray
Knowledge is an enigmatic concept to grasp: it has no boundaries, yet we tend to set our own because we know there is so much to know out there that we can’t possibly know everything, thus why we tend to set certain goals in our lives. These goals can be considered occupations of sorts, and they come with beneficial aspects such as money - or even fame. But are these occupations and careers in the right hand? In Carl Singleton’s essay, “What Our Education System Needs is More F’s”, we scrutinize the problematic issue that has spread through the American educational system, or as Singleton placed it, “The immediate need for our educational system from prekindergarten through post-Ph.D. is not more money or better teaching but simply a widespread giving of F’s.” Critical foundations of a student’s environment are brought up in Singleton’s essay such as teachers and parents, this is to say that they can be one (of the many) influences to why students are not trying hard enough, or are simply getting higher grades than they should be getting. In this essay, we will explore the degradation of school systems, operant conditioning, and the pros and cons of giving more F’s – and how they assist to exemplify and evaluate upon Singleton’s opinion to give more failing grades to students in order to bring up standards for the greater good.
Cory Feuerstein
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The failure of a student is reflective of the failure of a teacher. While there are many factors that contribute to the success or failure of a student, such as the student, teacher, administration, parents, and peers, the two main factors are the student and the teacher. The grade of a student reflects how well the student was able to pick up on the topic being presented, as well as how well a teacher could present the topic to the student. If many students are continuously receiving F's on a topic presented to the class, the teacher needs to re-evaluate how they are presenting the topic. Giving F's when they are deserved would get students to try harder in class, get parents to be more involved in their child's school work, and most importantly, ensure that teachers do there jobs correctly and to the best of their abilities.
The anxiety of receiving a failing grade is one of the most uncomfortable feelings to experience. If you have ever experienced failing on an assignment, one of the first things that will come to a student's mind is the parent's reaction when they find out. Carl Singleton believes that teachers should give more F's, which in his mind, we result in parents helping their children more with their school work. Giving out more F's is a very unnecessary tactic that can ruin future generations.
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